We have been using the app, Explain Everything, to comment on specific lines in our writing. You can read more about this experience here. Mrs. Steuart really pushed us to think more critically about our writing by pulling out lines and explaining why they were excellent.
Wow! What a great way to share your writing with each other and with parents! We love that you are thinking critically about writing, using creative and descriptive words, and drawing word pictures with metaphors and similes. Thanks for sharing your dreams with us!
Group 1: Kyle - I like how you got the idea from Rylan when you said - "To bounce back up". Good writers pick up different ideas from each other. I also like how Caleb got an idea from me when I said - "Put the pedal to the metal".
Group 7: I think Brooklyn did a great job describing what dreams are when she said "when you have a dream you feel a tingle in your heart, a shiver right through your body, your feet start to prickle and your heart starts to beat like a drum". I think this line really explains what it feels like to dream. I also think she did a good job at spicing her writing up.
Group 5: Rylan- I like the line "It is like a trampoline of determination" I like this line because is uses descriptive words like "trampoline" and "determination".
Group7: I like how they used lots of elaboration in their sentences. I also like that they used lovely language like in Brooklyn's ending paragraph. I like how she said "the spotlight is on you".
Group 1: I like how you used "spotlight" in your title and used it in your ending. It tied everything up in the end.You also used descriptive words like chant, tingle and prickle.
Group 7: I loved how you all sounded enthusiastic about accomplishing your dreams. I also liked how you all have different ways to explain something that is very important to you. I enjoyed how Reagan's title, "THE VOICE OF INSPIRATION", encourages me to keep going and it doesn't give the story away, but still informs the reader.
Excellent writing! I enjoyed hearing your voices describe what you liked best. Keep up the fantastic work!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Room 14! Loved listening to your 'dreams' and I hope one day they all come true!
ReplyDeleteWow! What a great way to share your writing with each other and with parents! We love that you are thinking critically about writing, using creative and descriptive words, and drawing word pictures with metaphors and similes. Thanks for sharing your dreams with us!
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Group 1: Kyle - I like how you got the idea from Rylan when you said - "To bounce back up". Good writers pick up different ideas from each other. I also like how Caleb got an idea from me when I said - "Put the pedal to the metal".
ReplyDeleteGroup2: Taylar- I like how your title is short and it rhymes which makes it fun to read.
ReplyDeleteGroup 6: Gage really used descriptive language and used a metaphor "you bounce back up on a trampoline of determination."
ReplyDeleteGroup 7: I think Brooklyn did a great job describing what dreams are when she said "when you have a dream you feel a tingle in your heart, a shiver right through your body, your feet start to prickle and your heart starts to beat like a drum". I think this line really explains what it feels like to dream. I also think she did a good job at spicing her writing up.
ReplyDeleteGroup 5: Rylan- I like the line "It is like a trampoline of determination" I like this line because is uses descriptive words like "trampoline" and "determination".
ReplyDeleteGroup7: I like how they used lots of elaboration in their sentences. I also like that they used lovely language like in Brooklyn's ending paragraph. I like how she said "the spotlight is on you".
ReplyDeletegroup 7: i like how brook-lynn used lovely flowing words like ; prickle shiver and chant
ReplyDeleteGroup 7: I like how Brook-lynn used juicy vocabulary and description like: prickle, shiver and tingle.
ReplyDeleteGroup 1: I like how you used "spotlight" in your title and used it in your ending. It tied everything up in the end.You also used descriptive words like chant, tingle and prickle.
ReplyDeleteGroup 7: I think Jack's writing used lots of juicy words like ''when you skate on the ice you feel as free as a bird''.
ReplyDeleteGroup 7: I loved how you all sounded enthusiastic about accomplishing your dreams. I also liked how you all have different ways to explain something that is very important to you. I enjoyed how Reagan's title, "THE VOICE OF INSPIRATION", encourages me to keep going and it doesn't give the story away, but still informs the reader.
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